The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many
people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that the appearance of advanced technology has largely influenced our lives, especially social media. Some people strongly believe that they can easily use social media to keep in touch with people that they know. However, others object that using social media causes some negative aspects in daily life. From my personal perspective, the disadvantages of using social media outweigh the benefits overall.
It is clear that there are several negative aspects of using social media in society. Firstly, social media discourages real interaction. In fact, when people spend much more time on using social media than interacting together, they might be easily lazy to communicate with others in real life. Therefore, it is difficult for them to develop social skills, especially communication skills. Additionally, using social media might be straightforward for hackers to steal personal information of users. Indeed, people tend to post anything on social media like Facebook or Instagram just because they want to save memories and express their feelings. It is a chance for hackers or thieves to attack. Finally, using social media for a long time can cause psychological changes and health problems. To be honest, people become addicted to using social media the whole day. As a result, they get disconnected from their surroundings and their behaviors may be changed in negative ways. Besides, it can cause some diseases related to the eyes due to the fact that they spend much time on social media.
On the one hand, there are several positive reasons why people should use social media. One reason is that it is possible to keep in touch with a large number of people, share photos as well as make small talks with others from all over the world. It is perfect for people to get more information about the countries, the cultures or even the exchanging news. Another reason is that it is a chance for people to gather all family members. Our families and friends may be often scattered across the globe due to working or studying, for example. Thanks to the existence of social media, the whole family can easily communicate as well as share any problems together. However, in spite of the benefits of using social media, I strongly believe that the disadvantages outweigh the benefits.
In conclusion, there is no doubt that although social media is widely used, I consider that its drawbacks have influenced people’s lives in many ways. I firmly believe that the disadvantages in terms of lack of interaction, the issues of privacy information as well as some health problems outweigh the advantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, as a result, as well as, in spite of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2200.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 432.0 315.596192385 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09259259259 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68329674974 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469907407407 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 692.1 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7114426287 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6666666667 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260460284439 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923962909853 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635697277956 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180921237579 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398255388489 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.