The use of social media, such as Facebook, Twitter, are replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, people have many methods and means to connect with each other. In particular, Facebook and Twitter are one of the social networking sites used by many young people. Consequently, there is a considerable concern for face to face interaction. From my perspective, I totally agree that the drawbacks of this trend overshadow its merits.
To begin with, it is true that the emergence of social networking websites and applications have revolutionized the way people contact one another. To be more specific, regardless of geographical distance, a person who only needs a smartphone connected to the internet can send messages or make use of video calls to keep in touch with their loved one, reducing the need for people to gather in one place for face to face conversations. In economic context, social media strongly promotes online sales activities. Take Amazon as an example, the company is very successful with online sales based on American social media habits, encouraged online shopping routines and generated a lot of profit.
However, going along with the benefits of social networking are its negative effects that we need to consider. The fact that many young people are addicted to Facebook, that means they spend too much time to access Facebook, sharing too much about their private life and issues on their personal page. Today, we can easily see the image of young people plugging their face into their phones to surf Facebook or selfies posted on twitter with tremendous frequency. They are confused between the real world and the virtual world, which brings bad impacts. Firstly, It will directly affect the health of people, especially eyesight. Excessive contact with phone or computer will cause vision loss, phone waves also have an adverse effect on the human brain and fertility. Another serious consequence is turning people into insensitive people. When they do not care about everything around them, they only pay attention to the number of likes and share of the illusion on social networks. The experiment involved two starved groups of people who frequently used social media apps and those who rarely used them. There was 35% of the people who constantly used social media apps refused to share their assistance food to others, but there was 80% of the people who rarely used social media apps agreed to share.
In conclusion, although social media has brought some benefits for society, the disadvantages of overusing such advanced technology to replace real-life communications are more much worrying.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, so, in conclusion, in particular, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 412.0 315.596192385 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19174757282 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65861138335 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580097087379 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9210465484 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.578947368 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6842105263 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23455433234 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646060417834 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490130467796 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145865783679 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266147821474 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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