When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Some folks try for convincing others about the perception of impact of technology which can destroy the old skills and ways of life in the society. I know that many parties are engaged in similar forum for discussing this debatable topic and in the following paragraphs I will deliver both of arguments.
On the one hand, traditional skills and ways of life are the foundation for any countries in order to achieve their goals of nation. In the recent years, the reality of negative impact of emerging technologies among of people can we look over together. One of these impact is it has turn off the spirit of nation. Taking away the senses of belonging for the living countries. Where people do not care anymore for solving the society problems. Technology has brought them to irrespectful climate. Second of them is erasing the national identity. Where, the local culture is not be a precious belonging of them. For example, the youngsters of nation, exactly, has imported a outside lifestyle in the daily life. At least but not the last, the technology has been bridging the hazardous thinking of outside to the young generations. If we want to track it more detail, it can be sensed that any attempts for destructing the countries internally by using the misleading conception among of generation.
On other hand, Technology is the paramount aspect for mounting the prosperity of nation. It is an inevitable fact which has spread in any country in the whole world. The advanced technology is urgently needed to improve the education system, increase the industrial productivity, make the innovation for public facilities and others. Second of all, technology is a tool and is not an final goals of country. Relating to the erasing of way of life, the role of technology is fully impacting this problem. Because, as a tool, the technology’s function is based on the users. If the nation can use it wisely, technologies will help them in sharping these way.
Eventually, I agree with this issue based on the fact that advancing technologies bring more benefit over the outweighs for countries. As long as the countries can anticipate the negative impact of it, I will be useful for riding technologies in accelerating the prosperity.
Comments
thank you, it is so helpful
thank you, it is so helpful
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use past participle here: 'turned'.
Suggestion: turned
...together. One of these impact is it has turn off the spirit of nation. Taking away t...
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Message: “Where” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... them is erasing the national identity. Where, the local culture is not be a precious...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...entity. Where, the local culture is not be a precious belonging of them. For examp...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...gsters of nation, exactly, has imported a outside lifestyle in the daily life. At...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...of all, technology is a tool and is not an final goals of country. Relating to the...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'goal'?
Suggestion: goal
...echnology is a tool and is not an final goals of country. Relating to the erasing of ...
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Message: Did you mean 'this way' or 'these ways'?
Suggestion: this way; these ways
...technologies will help them in sharping these way. Eventually, I agree with this issu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, second, so, at least, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 376.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98670212766 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88808602922 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531914893617 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 595.8 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9568317221 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.2272727273 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0909090909 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.18181818182 7.06120827912 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123322718835 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388507692704 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411117584102 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0845567857413 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0129798702184 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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