You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports
stars are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of job should be highly paid?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own
knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
In modern times, more and more money is earned by entertainers such as actors, singers, footballers, and basketballers etc. There are those who say that famous people who are from entertainment area earn huge amounts of money, however others believe that they earn what they deserve. In this essay, I will examine the both sides of the argument and provide my overall opinion.
Generally speaking, there are a wide range of reasons why people believe that performers earn more than they deserve. Perhaps, the main reason why people think like that is because poverty. Unlike in the past, people today need financial aid more and more. A good illustration of this is that thousands of people from South Africa die every year because of poverty. If they have strong economic conditions, they can live their lives just like they deserve. A further point in favour of this belief is that huge amount of money can be spent on society’s needs such as health services, education, and country’s security. As a result, society will be in a good social condition.
Despite these arguments, there is also a case for the idea that performers earn what they deserve. Firstly, they work really hard for their job and success. As a result, they have to use certain facilities to improve theirselves and they need money to do that. If they do not earn money which is the same amount with today, they will not be able to afford their needs such as training materials, studio items or basic materials. Secondly, almost all people in the world watch them in their leisure time. In fact, there is nobody to be watched instead of entertainers by millions of people. This is because colossal entertainment companies, football clubs or basketball clubs earn from advertisements and sponsorships much more than performers’ income. Normally, entertainers take their cut.
In conclusion, it must be said that the issue of entertiners’ earnings has become quite complex with no easy solutions. Having considered both sides of the issue, I believe that entertainers such as actors, singers or sportmans/sportwomans are paid too much money. In my opinion, they do not deserve as much as that amount of money. People who have jobs with high importance for society such as academics, doctors, nurses, lawyers deserve higher pay. If appropriate policies had been implemented by governments properly, there would have been equality about earnings between different sectors.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 403.0 315.596192385 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08933002481 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8266959338 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545905707196 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.654734324 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1739130435 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5217391304 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.39130434783 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157122297462 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490956083128 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317854319851 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104943055411 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289392069453 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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