Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction.Do you agree or disagree?Provide relevant examples if necessary.

Everyday news and media introduce us with different kinds of job as well as high salary demands. While some people think that big salary is more important than satisfaction of what we do. Though, money is essential for our day-to-day life, but I strongly disagree that money is more needful than job satisfaction. Huge salary might improve our life lifestyle. The way are live, saving, finance so on. Thus, around the world have uncountable things like peace, relaxation, happiness, money never can buy.

First of all, I believe that the one who holding big salary he or she have to maintain job with more stress. They may have to work more with too much responsibilities. In that case they have to give more times and affords to their job. Meanwhile, they are unable to make them self Happy as well as their family. For example, normally IT professional have huge salary, but their assignments, targets, projects killing them badly. As a result, they are putting concentration only for finishing the work not for obtaining the pleasure of fulfilment.

Moreover, for earning more people sometimes have to work all over the year, may be without taking any leave or holidays. All those are never proof good for health. Work load and work tension can be a reason of different kinds of disease. Recent study of the Harvard University can be taken for highlighting it. In 2012 they got that 40 percent employees are suffering heart disease and depression. So, we can tell that job satisfaction maintain our health and keep us away from illness.

In conclusion, everyone have different choose buy after all money can not by happiness.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...he one who holding big salary he or she have to maintain job with more stress. They ...
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Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ss. They may have to work more with too much responsibilities. In that case they hav...
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Line 7, column 47, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to buy'
Suggestion: to buy
...clusion, everyone have different choose buy after all money can not by happiness. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, after all, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1365.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92779783394 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67446900809 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617328519856 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.8788997356 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.8421052632 106.682146367 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5789473684 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84210526316 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168041391242 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500204983553 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719124920812 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0908789221048 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0904329163358 0.056905535591 159% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 50.2224549098 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.72 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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