Due to so many young people dropping out from schools, the rate of unemployment is increasing and it affects our society in different ways.
In your opinion, how can this situation be improved?
there are more and more young people enter into society before finishing their studies in schools which cause huge negative effects such as increasing unemployment rate and crime rate . In my personal view , in order to solve this problems , we need to understand the root cause then tackles them one by one . this essay will discuss as below.
everyone wants a brighter future with a well-paid job , but not everyone can afford the education to support their dreams. The tuition fees for universities increase year after year which far away out of some families' financial abilities even though those parents have saved money before the birth of children . As a result, some talented students have to give up their studying and find jobs like cashier to feed themselves . In order to improve this issue, government can set up financial support or scholarship to give those poverty young students a chance to finish degrees and then commit back to local community even the whole society.
Another reasons for dropping out is that some students are not good at the specific academical subjects which leads to failure in graduating . everyone has its own given gifts , some just hide deep which need time and energy to dig them out . parents would not force their kids to study mathematics if they were struggle with numbers . Instead of concentrating on what children not good at , teachers and parents should encourage them to follow their true interesting by supporting their with love with understanding . if more and more parents will do so , then fewer and fewer students drop out.
In conclusion , with support from family , young people to choose what to learn and with financial support from government, young people can keeping chasing their education, then there will be more and more excellent graduates .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06375838926 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54651066232 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607382550336 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4527358853 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.076923077 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9230769231 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61538461538 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 26.0 5.01903807615 518% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155383794139 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517988838132 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490767728976 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102534500447 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381524731836 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.