It is more important to invest in further education rather than to gain work experience after finishing university in order to find a good job.
Do you agree or disagree?
It is argued by some that investing in higher level education instead of gaining work experience immediately after graduating from university can be more helpful to get a good offer . I do not agree it and I will discuss the reasons in this essay .
Education in institutions usually has a huge gap with work markets . Most knowledge students learn from universities could not be used directly in really world work. For example, students who spend a lot of time in studying mathematics will find there is no much jobs requiring for math ability . If students chose to further their education such as taking part in master or even PhD study instead of working , there would be a huge lost for them because they can not gain practical abilities which suitable for future job as well as wasting precious time and lots of money .
At the same time, knowledge from university might out of date , because modern society is on the highly speed developing status which there are millions of new things and new concepts spring out on a daily basis . Each person who wants outstanding and get a good job needs to update his or her ability fast which further education in school can not supply . In converse , people should work first after graduation and learn from their daily work by solving different issues and grow from it .
In conclusion, in order to get a high-salary job , keeping learning at university might not be an ideally option compare to gaining experience and growing from work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, really, so, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1229.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81960784314 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58042921499 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623529411765 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 378.9 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.9305172393 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.9 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265051253624 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103669877912 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656888621906 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175205001045 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697130888258 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.