The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library’s manager, in your letter include:· A brief introduction of yourself· Your experience and relevant skills· Why you want the job

Essay topics:

The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library’s manager, in your letter include:
· A brief introduction of yourself
· Your experience and relevant skills
· Why you want the job

Hello sir or madam,
I am writing this letter because I am interesting in the summer job as an applicant. I am a sophomore student whose major is Computer Science and Technology . I want to know more about the details about how to apply this position .

I am a book lover who prefer reading indoor than other activities . Back to high school, I was the assistant of library's manager for the whole three years . During this time, my main job was to maintain all books in the library. I am the person who really good at computer program ( that's the reason why I choose my major in university now) , I helped to write an easy version library manage system which can saved a lot of time to maintain the borrowing and returning records .

I think my experience and personal ability can make me outstanding of other candidates . Like I said before , I enjoy the time with books and hope to contribute more .

I hope to get your reply soon .

Faithfully,
Catherine Wan

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Hello sir or madam, I am writing this letter because I am in...
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Line 2, column 39, Rule ID: BE_INTEREST_IN[1]
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... I am writing this letter because I am interesting in the summer job as an applicant. I am...
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...major is Computer Science and Technology . I want to know more about the details ...
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Line 2, column 158, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...ajor is Computer Science and Technology . I want to know more about the details a...
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...details about how to apply this position . I am a book lover who prefer readin...
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... about how to apply this position . I am a book lover who prefer reading indo...
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...fer reading indoor than other activities . Back to high school, I was the assistan...
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...brarys manager for the whole three years . During this time, my main job was to ma...
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...rson who really good at computer program thats the reason why I choose my major i...
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...on who really good at computer program thats the reason why I choose my major in uni...
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... why I choose my major in university now , I helped to write an easy version libra...
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...tain the borrowing and returning records . I think my experience and personal...
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...n the borrowing and returning records . I think my experience and personal abili...
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... make me outstanding of other candidates . Like I said before , I enjoy the time w...
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...of other candidates . Like I said before , I enjoy the time with books and hope to...
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...e with books and hope to contribute more . I hope to get your reply soon . ...
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...ith books and hope to contribute more . I hope to get your reply soon . Faith...
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...ore . I hope to get your reply soon . Faithfully, Catherine Wan
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... to get your reply soon . Faithfully, Catherine Wan
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, really, so, as to, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 792.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 172.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60465116279 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5862725494 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.674418604651 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 255.6 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3884852431 44.8134815571 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.0 76.5299724578 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6363636364 16.8248392259 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.81818181818 4.34317383033 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 2.54639175258 746% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147145125549 0.216113520407 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462768243176 0.0766984524023 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048115599096 0.0603063233224 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0621451342158 0.12726935374 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443191567186 0.0580467560999 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 8.37731958763 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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