Films and computer games which contain violence are very popular. Some people believe they have a negative effect on society and so should be banned. Other people, however, say they are just harmless and help people to relax. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, television and computer games are fully loaded with violent scenes. So, some people of the society believe that these programs and games should be stopped. While, opponents believe that these televisions programs are just source of entertainment. According to me, I persuaded with the first statement and strongly agree that government should stop displaying these criminal films and plays to protect the society from crime.
On the one hand, people who believe that the violent television series and games effect locals thinking. In addition, it foster ones mind with negative thoughts and made them believe that its good to be behave negative and respond bad. Moreover, they feel empower and attractive to rude behaviour. As a result, they give birth to criminal activities such as murder, rape, shoplifting and ransom. According to a recent survey published in Times New York newspaper, which describes that significant number of criminals agree that they have been following the crime series displayed on television. Furthermore, they learned how to commit a perfect crime. Second on the list, Youngsters they feel satisfied to kill someone through the games available on the Internet. Also they learn the vulgar language and being impatient. Eventually, distract them from becoming good human.
On the another hand, people standing with varied view point and strongly believe that, these kind of films and games are just the source of entertainment. It helps people to look beyond the basic life events and restore their energy levels back to normal. Also it boost their mind and body to perform better in real life. Next point to consider, it teaches people how to handle any negative situation occurred. In 2017, according to a poll done by American university stated that the eighty percent of students offend themselves from harmful tregedy just by learning strategies through television.
In conclusion, after discussing the arguments of both the sides. According to me, I still strongly believe that violent plays and scenes should be completely eliminated from the television and computers. Because, it is human nature to apply things seen over a period of time in real life. Instead of showing violence government should promote the positive things such as peace and harmony.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, look, moreover, second, so, still, while, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31147540984 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60971157862 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565573770492 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.4259198803 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3636363636 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6363636364 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86363636364 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.9879759519 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325446273246 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828323796327 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718505429148 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17470531186 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541885581409 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.22 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.