A government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety Therefore some people think that the government should increase spending on defence but spend less on social benefits To what extent do you agree

Essay topics:

A government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety. Therefore, some people think that the government should increase spending on defence but spend less on social benefits.
To what extent do you agree?

It is a never-ending debate whether a government should invest the taxed money in strengthening strengthing the armed forces to secure nation or on THE welfare of the citizens to help them to improve their quality of life. In my opinion, a healthy and happy community is the backbone of a nation; I am a staunch supporter of this statement. I shall support my stand with valid arguments in the ensuing paragraphs.

Majority of the countries in the world are developing and have a low standard of healthcare and education. Further, lack of schools, low employment rate, and poor housing have made young ones to start earning from a very tender age to support their family monetarily. Thus, keeping the above scenarios in mind the funding generated by taxing people income should be diverted to the people upliftment in different sectors primarily, schooling and technology. In a survey, conducted by the catalysts and researchers it is concluded that majority of the people, especially infants, in the developing countries die because of lack of basic medical care.

Moreover, THE government along with the charities should utilize the money by building schools and health centers. Besides, high authorities should invite the developed countries to invest in long term project and provide funding to multi-national companies to open their offices in their homeland, which will not only generate more vacancies but will improve the economy of the state. Whereas developed countries are concerned, they are the countries which have laboratories for developing ammunitions, and they supply it to developing countries and make huge profits.

To conclude, I would like to say that developing nations should firstly -FIRST target and solve the social issues present in their community, which in turn will improve their economy. Consequently, with a new generation will boom who will have the knowledge and skill to make the borders secure.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (13 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, then, thus, whereas, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26451612903 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88052053337 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58064516129 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.6425251572 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.0 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8333333333 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0952598211196 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0338919633426 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392255886709 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0580992870432 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0101383776465 0.056905535591 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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