The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in school curriculum.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people believe that more physical education lessons in the school curriculum will help combat overweight problems amongst the people. In my opinion, this approach / move will help create a nation of health conscious people. This, in turn, will reduce the burden on the government to contribute to the health sector. Instead, it can use those resources in areas like education and employment.
First and foremost, children are more likely to follow what is taught in the classroom. So, if there are more physical education lessons, they will readily learn about ways to keep them fit and healthy. By giving extra importance to physical education, teachers can instill in children the habit of following a healthy lifestyle from the start. In addition, nowadays in many families both the husband and the wife work and hence they do not have time to monitor the eating habits of their children. In such situations, if the child is well-informed he can help himself to decide when to eat what.
Also, a habit that is developed during younger stages in life is more likely to stay with them throughout their life. A well informed person will not only follow a healthy routine himself but will also motivate the people around him. Finally, overweight problems, if not controlled, lead to obesity and combating obesity is a tough task. It not only requires individual efforts but also medications. This increases the burden on the government to invest in a situation which could have stopped earlier. Worse still, it blocks funds which could have been used in more critical areas like poverty.
In conclusion, I believe imparting physical education at the right age will help fight overweight problems and reduce government spending in the health care sector.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, so, still, well, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1482.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11034482759 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59574172139 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586206896552 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.5402404447 49.4020404114 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.625 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.125 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20289002099 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621827365431 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737465467019 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127850744213 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579459315067 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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