If you are given a chance to change, what change would you implement in 21 century to make your world a better place to live. Discuss a few changes.
Down the centuries, world has been dramatically changed. Advance technologies have drastically changed the way we live our life. Everything which seemed impossible a decade back is now a reality. Yet, there is still more to achieve. It’s a world of innovation, speed and technology which has adversely affected us socially in many ways. If I would be given a chance, I would definitely like to work on better social stability, bringing peace among different countries and end the war between rich and poor.
To begin with, there is a far stretched line between poor and rich, the world has become a place where rich people are increasing their wealth passing day and poor are going below poverty level. The biggest dilemma is lack of equal distribution of resources and wealth. There must be reforms that should enforce wealthy people to spend a portion of their resources over poor people to get them the basic necessities of life. Furthermore, as of now, many countries are war zoned. People are being murdered in the name of religion and murderers are not aware of the actual reason for killing. Innocent people are being victimized out of no reason. There should be equal opportunity for all people to practice their religion irrespective of their geographical location.
To elucidate it further, it is quite evident that technology has reduced distances and every person is now just a click away. But, this phenomenon has negatively impacted our society particularly young generation who is obsessed with gadgets. These gadgets are actually creating communication gap among families. Young people are reluctant spending time with family. Youth is so encircled with their social activities that they are not concerned about family values and morals at all. Technology has somehow made people insensitive. There should be communities that make people realize that it is important to spend time with family as well. I would like to assert to the goal of reducing gap among families. Perhaps we are going far ahead in technology but socially we are lacking behind.
One important factor that should not be neglected is the ease of access of medical facilities. There is no obvious denial that medically we are doing exceptional and we have identified cure of such diseases which seems incurable few years back. Problem lies with the access of treatment. Treatment of the diseases which are fatal in nature is quite expensive and not easily available across the globe. I would like to build a hub of medical facilities, perhaps an online portal where people can approach doctors for different diseases and their treatments.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...ources over poor people to get them the basic necessities of life. Furthermore, as of now, many c...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ifferent diseases and their treatments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, if, so, still, well, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 13.1623246493 251% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 432.0 315.596192385 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10185185185 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7060135681 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 176.041082164 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 506.74238477 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9016419661 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.6296296296 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.2962962963 7.06120827912 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0636515369438 0.244688304435 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0153886056463 0.084324248473 18% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0256862212123 0.0667982634062 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0437709139945 0.151304729494 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412319721813 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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