Increasing numbers of students are going to university instead of working after high school.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who do this.
This is a fact that in these days, there is a cut throat competition among youngsters for occupying positions in prestigious universities is ever increasing. It is provided that school leavers prefer to continue further relevant study by enrolling in colleges and universities rather than working. According to my perception this phenomenon has both the merits and demerits.
On the one hand, numerous advantages are attached to this trend. Firstly, in this fast paced world only those people can get better employment opportunities offered by reputed companies, who are well-qualified as well as skilled as most of the organizations tend to employ productive workforce. That is why, if students would hold degrees and diplomas, it allows them to choose a profession in their own field and otherwise it would result in unemployment. Secondly, in the modern age, after completing secondary school education majority of pupils prefer to go abroad and get attractive career options as they have tendency to explore world. Therefore, university education not only provides written certificates of diligent study but also build some abilities and skills. It assists them in their further career. Finally, today technology and automation is replacing outdated methods of doing work as colleges and other large educational institutes arrange internships and training programs for graduates to develop their confidence and also provide them with real work experience. Also, universities emphasis on making the learners able to take responsibility on their shoulders and making them ready to fill a higher job position in a major company. As a result, it is advantageous for students to go for tertiary education to be familiar with ungraded technology and to build problem solving and communication skills.
On the other hand, along with advantages this leads to some potential drawbacks for you g ones. First of all, beginning a job after completing twelfth standard would restrict young ones to have useful skills as they are not mature and educated enough to get a salaried profession. Consequently, they are deprive of the training sessions and sufficient knowledge about their sector. Besides this, if they would not go to universities for higher studies, they can not discharge all duties at work due to lack of knowledge and experience. Apart from this, youngsters may opt a field of their interest after schooling as in schools children study basic but important subjects. However, when they enter in college they continue study by choosing a particular stream such as business, banking, medical and fashion designing. As a consequence, they would be unable to possess fruitful skills and to get a position in companies owing to lack of knowledge about technical advancements and computer applications.
To conclude, although i believe that this phenomenon has some obvious benefits for infants, some downsides are also associated that makes it a poor choice for younger ones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, apart from, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2519.0 1615.20841683 156% => OK
No of words: 469.0 315.596192385 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3710021322 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98661398018 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 176.041082164 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567164179104 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 506.74238477 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2089278223 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.95 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.45 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.65 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233328662352 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636108233884 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460897353949 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12977333257 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383906387719 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 78.4519038076 186% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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