In many countries the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Some think this is good, while others believe this is a problem for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays there seem to be a gradual climb in the overall population of the aged in the society. This development has been attributed, by some observers, to be beneficial, while some others believe there would be drawbacks to the occurrence. In my opinion, the consequences of the incremental addition to the elderly in our communities will definitely bear some huge cost to the government, and eventually, citizens at large.
Overtime, as a specific country becomes prosperous and rich in standard of living it ultimately reflects in the mortality index. Therefore, indications that prolong life expectancy, directly linked to development of health care systems; good interpersonal relations; adequate security; improved government policies with regards to welfare, justice and rule of law are spot on. For instance, in Japan, the growing rate of aged people especially in provinces like Sardinia and Okinawa attests to the fact that good and relaxed environment coupled with peace of mind can prolong life. Also, these cities are not lacking in basic amenities needed to live well. Again, people feel this rise is essential to help keep values and connection with the young ones sustained. In the sense that, the older folks in a family releash the bonding with their grandchildren; which most likely, will involve instilling discipline and training melted out to the fragile and young ones.
On the other hand, there is the cause effect of the astronomical growth into old age on the coffers of the government and also in investment of time on its able citizens. To illustrate this: government would be left with no option than to increase expenditure on recurrent budget as it will involve judicious spending on pensions. After working for the nation, with their fruitful years, its expected of the authority to cater for them; give them monthly sums; provide health care systems to keep them alive. Also the burden will be extended to the youths as they will be drafted, voluntary or involuntary (if offered a paid job by the government) to see to the upkeep and sanity of their aged counterparts.
In summary, there will always be the grown up advanced in age amongst us; however, the way and manner in which this inevitable reality is managed can either be to the good of the host country; or obviously, can be onerous to the growth of the nation. Nevertheless, I strongly believe that, the government has a strong part to play and must be ready to securing the future of these aged ones as it will surely be cost demanding on the system.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 510, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...health care systems to keep them alive. Also the burden will be extended to the yout...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, well, while, for instance, in summary, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 41.998997996 174% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2126.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 426.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99061032864 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78889441682 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 176.041082164 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579812206573 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.7120597933 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.733333333 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.73333333333 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142081512194 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449972527879 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461881001231 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867467745899 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327153664318 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.03 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 78.4519038076 172% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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