Many people say that we now live in ‘consumer societies’ where money and possessions are given too much importance. Others believe that consumer culture has played a vital role in improving our lives. Discuss both views and give your opinion

It is irrefutable that, we have involved in dual situation. Some people believe that, nowadays, standard of living, unwanted stuffs have plethora amounts of value. On the other hand, people say that, today people and government taking postive steps to promote culture activities in the form of tourism etc. I would like to discuss both point with relevant examples.

At begin with, In 21st era, people are more conscious about their lifestyle, standard of living etc. That's why they gives too much importance of money and possessions. They just make the plan for earn the money and try to fullfil our extra circular activities. However, I do not disagree with that, today life has became more tough. We cannot depend on single person. Men and women both are working to provide fruitful life for their children and families. For example, 80 percent foreign people are busy to the offical life and earn money for circular activities. Not only foreign country, Asian country are also follwing same traditions. Eventually, it is fact that, nowadays, we are living in consumer society instead market.

On the other hand, I do not disagree, with this statement culture is playing very vital role in our life. Is there some country promote culture in very widel range. For instances, America is tremendously support to their culture in the form of street painting, they promote their artist in all over the world and provide huge amount of benefits. Moreover, there are many countries who cannot promote their culture effectively. We ensure that, it is the best way for earn resources. If, we promote tourism and many more. I usually think about that, what is the reason behind it? Unfortunately, we have lacked of knowledge regarding tourism, cultures, traditions and education. It is ensure that, government should take the responsibility to mounting this sector and try to achieve better economy.

I put in it nutshell, I pen down saying that, government and individuals both are play active role and promote the culture activity and reduce the commodity life.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'give'
Suggestion: give
... standard of living etc. Thats why they gives too much importance of money and posses...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'ensured'.
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...ltures, traditions and education. It is ensure that, government should take the respon...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, for example, for instance, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07647058824 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57786022154 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552941176471 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 5.43587174349 331% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3241549717 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.0434782609 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7826086957 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.82608695652 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191868947005 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540969521376 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459453276212 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117109442189 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133147229294 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.59 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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