Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?
Most people have a tight schedule, they work too much and sometimes they are stuck behind a desk the whole day. Also, they do not have sufficient time for spending on their hobbies. In this case, most people believe they become workaholic and they face health problems. However, some people think they are more likely to get a promotion in their jobs on a regular basis and they might have a sense of achievement.
On the one hand, working too much without having fun has several disadvantages. Firstly, people who work long hours lead a sedentary lifestyle. Therefore, they are very likely to suffer from spinal problems. Meanwhile, they might stay up through the night so as to work more. Consequently, they are prone to sleep deprivation. Secondly, since this kind of people spend whole time on work, they are less likely to have a sensible eating plan. Thus, they might indulge in fast and fatty food and their poor diet leads to several health problems such as food poisoning and indigestion.
On the other hand, working long hours has various advantages. Firstly, as a result of working too much, people are more likely to get a raise on a yearly basis. Therefore, they might find their job fulfilling. It can play a vital role on advancement in society. Secondly, individuals who work full time might have a lucrative career. Since they do not spend their money for leisure activities, they are rich. It can bring a sense of satisfaction in their life. Thirdly, working too much results in experienced and skilled workforce. It is decisive factor in achieving companies’ goals. Thus, this kind of people have great career opportunities.
To conclusion, from my point of view, people work in order to have better life. Therefore, they should enjoy their life and leisure activities because having hobbies bring positive energy to work efficiently.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
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Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...society. Secondly, individuals who work full time might have a lucrative career. Since th...
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Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ion in their life. Thirdly, working too much results in experienced and skilled work...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, while, as to, kind of, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1548.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94568690096 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64575324006 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527156549521 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4021219155 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.3043478261 106.682146367 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6086956522 20.7667163134 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21739130435 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241713031926 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776458336249 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565528072946 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170341467457 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224487491103 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.0946893788 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 50.2224549098 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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