Nowadays, it is possible to move sea creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated in amusement parks for the purpose of people’s recreation. Do you think advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages?
Explain your reasons and support them with specific examples.
In many countries, there are large aquaria which showcase exotic marine life for recreational purposes of humans. Some of them are even large enough to accommodate giant animals such as, whales, sharks and so on. People feel excited to have a glimpse of rare aquatic species; however, those animals will feel uncomfortable and are unable to survive in an artificial environment. Therefore, I believe that there are more demerits of keeping aquatic creatures in captivity.
On the one hand, not all people are capable enough to venture out in an ocean for observing aquatic world. An aquarium will fulfil one’s desire to have a glimpse on wide variety of oceanic animals. The other aspect is that some aqua parks are capable of breeding species which are on the verge of extinction. For instance, the Blue Coral Aquarium of Malaysia, successfully bread coelacanth which they caught off the coast of Kualalumpur, one of the rarest species which were thought to have extinct hundreds of years ago. At the same time, fifty percent of all sea animals in the very same aquarium died due to diseases of unknown origin. Though it is somewhat advantageous to keep marine life in confinement, they can flourish if they were left free in the wild oceans.
On the other side, wild creatures at sea prefer to live free and any sort of confined space will make them uncomfortable. In addition to that, they will also lose their natural instinct to hunt as they will be fed by the caretakers regularly. For example, a research carried out by a group of marine biologists reveal that sharks in captivity lost their aggressive nature of hunting and simply started feeding off of the meat fed by the zoo keepers in Thailand aqua park.
To summarize, keeping marine creatures in captivity has merits such as entertainment and breeding of rare species, there are more demerits related to their physical and mental health which will suggest that these creatures are best left in their natural dwelling, ocean.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, sort of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97916666667 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62720422249 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559523809524 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9367070495 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.5 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157138450327 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504411923476 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.025771186933 0.0667982634062 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.092591177079 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0202120869785 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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