Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventing measures.
To what extent do you agree.
Many believe that, it is always better to take preventive measures than to invite illness and then treating it, because, otherwise, government needs to spend a great amount of money in research and development of medicines and also to provide better treatment to the citizens. I agree to this, but advancement in medical science cannot be neglected.
On the one hand, spending a significant amount of the government budget on pharmaceutical and surgical interventions is beneficial for society. Many modern day diseases such as diabetes, heart disease, and cancer are caused by lifestyle choices, like smoking, excessive dietary fat and sugar, and a lack of physical excise. For example, a survey shows that about 95% of people who caused cancer and heart disease had a habit of smoking. It is undeniable that the cost involved in the treatment of these diseases is very high, and also the cause for this medical condition is unclear. This leads to the conclusion that it is necessary to take preventive action.
Taking the necessary preventive various actions is important. For one, the government could provide more and more health and fitness Centre’s and spread public awareness camp to encourage people to use them. In addition to this, adding an additional tax on sugary drinks and processed foods, and also special taxes on tobacco products to discourage their use. I believe that measures such as these will in long term dramatically reduce the incidence of certain deadly diseases.
To conclude, however, it is not necessary that all the modern diseases are preventable or predictable, and it is critical to maintain research into cures for all diseases. Thus, it is important to countries to spend on treatment to preventative measures, in fact there should be a balanced approach which will extend lifespans and maximize the quality of life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: ADD_AN_ADDITIONAL[1]
Message: This phrase might be redundant. Use simply 'adding a tax'.
Suggestion: adding a tax
...eople to use them. In addition to this, adding an additional tax on sugary drinks and processed foods, a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, thus, for example, in addition, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1821192053 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85573518645 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586092715232 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3205826425 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.384615385 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2307692308 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17757068301 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562917336172 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571338574718 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112119169298 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680723209362 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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