Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
It has been observed that in many countries, young individuals are adopting shopping as one of the most practiced activities in their spare time. In this essay, I will delve deeper into this topic by discussing different causes and their constructive and detrimental effects on our societies of the aforementioned viewpoint, while advocating for the latter.
To begin with, one of the primary reasons for adolescents to visit different shops in leisure is to follow contemporary fashion. This implies that the teenagers are likely to purchase newly released commodities such as outfits, shoes or wrist watches in the market whereby they could showoff the trending valuables to their family and friends so that they might assert their dominance in their social circle. Consequently, the adverse effect of such practice is that this can create a sense of competition in the community, which may make people more judgmental to others, thereby, giving other respect according to what they possess.
Furthermore, having an increasing overall people’s purchasing power is another reason that juveniles go for shopping more frequently. This means that due to globalization, many nations are able to extend their businesses across the world so the economy situation in their territories might be better than before. As a result, the positive outcome from this scenario is that people can earn extra money and they could afford more buying , hence improving their lifestyle than older times .
In conclusion, although people may favour the productive influence of extreme shopping, I personally believe that its negative consequences can severely impact our societies. However, the general populace should adopt moderate purchasing behaviours so that they can avoid creating a sense of competition in their social surroundings.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50177935943 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92155425746 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.654804270463 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.016019811 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.6 106.682146367 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3 7.06120827912 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174215227601 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072227270373 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537126122838 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108935013195 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699485911286 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.53 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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