Should long term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community?

Employer benefits is became one of the essential requirement for the job hunting. Hence, it is thought by some people that individuals who look for permanent jobs will require to do some voluntary work as helping the community. I completely agree with the notion because it provides better future prospects and purpose of life.

Permanent work finder always have handsome salary and group benefits which only beneficial for them and their family. If they provide their important time in short term voluntary work, it would significantly be useful to their personal and social development. For example, people who often spend their precious time in charities and NGOs are more happier and successful in their life because the value and lessons they learned. On the other hand, other people are more involved in work related problems and family conflicts and, as a result, it often lead them into stress and anxiety.

Another vital benefit associated with voluntary is that its open a wide variety of career options for public. In other words, when job searcher apply for a new lucrative positions with attaching their voluntary experience, they are more likely to get selected for the position compared to those who do not have a community work experience in resume. Additionally, full-time jobs only provide the monetary gain and job satisfaction but voluntary work will crucially change ones life. To exemplify, after day to day working life, humans become exceptionally tired working at same workplace. If they need excited and purposeful life without any materialistic goals then probably voluntary work can be integral part.

In conclusion, although full-time jobs only advantageous for materialistic life, voluntary work can give true perspective of life. Therefore, people require to do free community work in order to live happier and healthier life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 22, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
Employer benefits is became one of the essential requirement for th...
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Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
...ho look for permanent jobs will require to do some voluntary work as helping the comm...
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Line 3, column 343, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'happier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: happier
...precious time in charities and NGOs are more happier and successful in their life because th...
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Line 3, column 552, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'leads'?
Suggestion: leads
...ly conflicts and, as a result, it often lead them into stress and anxiety. Anothe...
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Line 5, column 171, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'position'?
Suggestion: position
... job searcher apply for a new lucrative positions with attaching their voluntary experien...
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Line 5, column 313, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion compared to those who do not have a community work experience in resume. Add...
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Line 5, column 474, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ut voluntary work will crucially change ones life. To exemplify, after day to day wo...
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Line 7, column 158, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
...tive of life. Therefore, people require to do free community work in order to live ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in short, as a result, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1571.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30743243243 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74718254968 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597972972973 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0933332857 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.214285714 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228687973892 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858947163992 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453379413091 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148206843647 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409123414056 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in short, as a result, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments