In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing.
What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In today’s modern world, obesity is emerging as a serious issue which is leading to devastating health issues. In the following essay, we will discuss the principle causes and possible solutions to tackle health problems associated with obesity.
Firstly, everyone is busy in their lives. Job and family commitments make it impossible for one to cook for themselves, thus relying on fast foods which are convenient to buy but packed with the massive amount of calories. Increased consumption of processed food items manifests itself in the form of weight gain cause the health to deteriorate. For instance, MacDonald’s and KFC are offering full meals for less than 3 dollars, which attracts the customers due to excellent cost. Thus the easy accessibility and price factors are making such products popular day by day.
Secondly, a decrease in physical activity is another leading cause of obesity. Some people have sitting jobs while others prefer to spend their time indoors. Such sedentary lifestyle creates an imbalance between energy intake and consumption resulting in increased weight. Moreover, a lack of exercise has a bad effect on vital organs like the heart. For example, a recent survey shows a 60 percent increase in ischemic heart diseases secondary to obesity due to lack of physical activity. Hence, lack of proper exercise is another leading cause.
The question arises, what can be done to stop such problems? At first, the government needs to introduce proper legislation in regards to caloric control at fast food places. A proper meal plan with a certain amount of greens salads should be made compulsory. For example, the law in US says to serve salads with every burger meal. Secondly, every person should make a personal effort to increase physical activity. By making a proper schedule for the day anyone can spare an hour for his own self and exercise. The positive effect of such effort will bring priceless advantages to one’s life.
In conclusion, the abundance of convenience foods and lack of physical exercise are the main reasons for health issue related to obesity. The solution, however, lies in proper legislation and an individual’s effort for the improvement of his own health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21329639889 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80510273905 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590027700831 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7382872879 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5454545455 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4090909091 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72727272727 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149377706173 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0415397412017 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345740626817 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0811104887896 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00749442210544 0.056905535591 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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