Some countries encourage teenagers to have part-time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree. Give your opinion and explain both views.
Having a part-time job is an area of concern and a controversial topic for many countries. Some nations seduce youths to commit with a job beside their education at early age; while others reject this notion, believing that it deteriorates the educational path. I partially agree with both sides, and this essay will discuss both views, followed by a reasoned conclusion.
Committing to a part-time job along with completing studies affects positively on persons personality and instruments his or her career path. Although it is hard to balance it for some people, it increases their sense of responsibility and gives some sort of special experience in the work-force markets. Many of businessmen started their businesses at early ages because they were eager to figure out the market beside their studies at colleges. For example, Mark Zuckerberg, Facebook`s CEO, attended Harvard University, where he launched Facebook from his dormitory room on February 4, 2004. Mr. Zuckerberg is the youngest billionaire in the world.
On the other side, some countries advocate not to push younger people to commit to any kind of work till finishing their educational studies. The impact of work might be severe and lead some people to stop their studies and involve more in the work life, and it happens in the poor counties where located in the third-world due to not understanding of the importance for the education. For instance, a survey is undertaken by a prestigious university in United Kingdom, and it states that 90 % of children who have part -time job is not completing their schooling.
To sum up, it is good to start work early to measure the market needs and boost skills, but considering the effects and drawbacks that may be a consequences of not completing the education is important.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ompleting studies affects positively on persons personality and instruments his or her ...
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Line 7, column 143, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a consequence' or simply 'consequences'?
Suggestion: a consequence; consequences
...g the effects and drawbacks that may be a consequences of not completing the education is impo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, third, while, for example, for instance, kind of, sort of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11148648649 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95837569601 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60472972973 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4523152462 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.083333333 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179160331491 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639223559891 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049587055024 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102970214537 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633736854942 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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