In some countries today, children are taught from a young age that competition is important and that winning is everything.
Is this a positive or a negative development?
Many people believe that there is nothing without winning and they inculcate this rationale in kids and teach them to compete. I think this is a negative approach. In this essay, I will discuss about the advantages and disadvantages of it and explain my view along with supporting examples.
To commence with, success is a feeling that makes us exceptional from the world. This happens when you practise, work hard and have sheer determination. In order to nurture his values to the kids, people teach them the importance to win. While learning to be competitive, the adolescents can progress either negatively or posiitively. Though teaching children that winning is everything, they learn to boost confidence, focus and work hard. For instance, the tutorials puts how to be competitive among the students. Furthermore, younger people become discipline, and learn the value of success.
However, they also learn cheating, disrespecting the competitors, and sometimes it can turn fatal. For example, the formula one car race competitors sometimes brutally kill in order to defeat the others. Few may start loosing confidence if they fail and cannot see other ways. This is affect mentally and lead to depressions. For instance, many students of engineering commit suicide on failing the exams. additionally, the same concept might divide into two groups making as Aplha and others referring as winners and failures.
To sumup, although the kids should be thaught about competition, but not showing other sides of winning. Instead, these innocents could be thought to try again if they lose.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 26, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to cheat'.
Suggestion: to cheat
...of success. However, they also learn cheating, disrespecting the competitors, and som...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 205, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little may'.
Suggestion: Little may
...lly kill in order to defeat the others. Few may start loosing confidence if they fail a...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 407, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Additionally
...ng commit suicide on failing the exams. additionally, the same concept might divide into two...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30708661417 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86292759124 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.681102362205 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.3094758743 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.8888888889 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1111111111 20.7667163134 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117457204001 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0364379423447 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408576164675 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0638714946601 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056638350189 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 26, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to cheat'.
Suggestion: to cheat
...of success. However, they also learn cheating, disrespecting the competitors, and som...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 205, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little may'.
Suggestion: Little may
...lly kill in order to defeat the others. Few may start loosing confidence if they fail a...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 407, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Additionally
...ng commit suicide on failing the exams. additionally, the same concept might divide into two...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30708661417 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86292759124 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.681102362205 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.3094758743 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.8888888889 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.1111111111 20.7667163134 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117457204001 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0364379423447 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408576164675 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0638714946601 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056638350189 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.