In some cultures, children are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?
Since the development of the humanity, various cultures have been developing in different ways. Proceeding from this in some nations the rule for the young exists that the hardly a child tries the more successful they will become. This essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of the given issue with appropriate support of my point of view.
The main excellences of this principle are great education, that children receive at the schools and universities and their experience in achieving goals.
In this case, following this advice the opportunity to possess a lot of knowledge are available. For example, my friend Polina gave this message for her children, when they were about 5-6 years old, and now they are working for a large aircraft company. In addition, this method allows everybody to learn how efficiently to plan their life. For example, according to the statistics from the Social Institute of Russia, 86 percents children, who aspired after this advise are more successful, then other. Hence, children ought to spare attention their efforts, which they put into their studies.
In my opinion the main drawbacks are that such children do not obtain enough time for the friends and games and they often ill. They study hardly and spend much time in the libraries reading a huge number of books. In addition such people suffering from headaches for they accumulate tiredness. For example, according to the article in the journal «Medicine in Voronezh», last year 53 children were brought to the hospitals due to poor health. Thus, children should find their own work-balance contributing essential ending results.
Taking everything into account, it can be concluded that the idea of influencing the future of children by hard studying and working in their childhood has positive and negative effect.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 464, Rule ID: GIVE_ADVISE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'advice' (a noun)?
Suggestion: advice
...rcents children, who aspired after this advise are more successful, then other. Hence,...
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Line 5, column 134, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'hardly' is usually put before the verb 'study'.
Suggestion: hardly study
...ends and games and they often ill. They study hardly and spend much time in the libraries re...
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Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...ries reading a huge number of books. In addition such people suffering from headaches fo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, then, thus, for example, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24406779661 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68461735697 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623728813559 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3662504137 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.133333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73333333333 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336724099977 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0978861229651 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485440077162 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161670816327 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407254694839 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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