Some people believe that entertainers are more important than scientists? Do you agree or disagree? Support with reasons and examples from your experience
Some would argue that adolescents should decide themselves about their career and growth for living better. While others believe that guardians and mentors should take care of young lives and give them a good career that can help them have a great future. Although going on the same path as our elders did would lead to a bright future, it doesn't provide the key skills needed to survive when adults are all alone. I believe that everyone should definitely understand what life has to give to us and prepare for the hardships whenever necessary and grow strong and build our future.
To begin with, at times parents would suggest their grown-up children to handle their business or follow the same way as their father's or mother's and settle with ease and in a comfortable route. A mentor could only verbally help but not physically force adults to choose the opportunity. Either of them do not understand what personally a youngster have in his mind or what he wanted to all the time when he encounters his parents or teachers. For example, a recent study by the University of Oxford revealed that only 5% of people are interested in doing what their parents or well-wishers would ask them to do. this proves that bearing individuality would fetch greater success if not that the truth they are ignoring their mentors.
Factors that a person meets at various stages of his life teach a remarkable lesson about life, this can only be experienced when we think of our future for ourselves, we must not ignore the fact that hurdles are all the way when we cross them we end up in a successful shore to relax upon. For instance, a recent study among 100 adolescents revealed that a person who could grow individually can survive the worst situations come defeat or victory in his life.
In conclusion, despite the fact of comfort in pursuing the same way as our elders do, the strength we gain by settling on our own can last long. I desperately feel that one should have broad vision about their own future and life so that we can reach to the sky.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43414269443 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550964187328 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.5219040122 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.307692308 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9230769231 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76923076923 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0501196123 0.244688304435 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0197555472093 0.084324248473 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0230108169309 0.0667982634062 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0288665894895 0.151304729494 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228342588117 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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