Some people feel that entertainers (e.g film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

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Some people feel that entertainers (e.g film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

In today’s world artists from film fraternity or musicians, athletes are minting an ample amount of money. However, I completely disagree with the statement and will provide evidence in the below paragraphs to justify my point of view.
To embark on, defence forces be it BSF, Army, Air force or Navy should be the highest paid job. It would not be wrong to say that they put their lives in danger for the sake of their country and their fellow citizens. It is entirely because of their sacrifices, we are able to celebrate special moments with our loved ones, we are able to celebrate life. I can reminisce of few great martyrs of our land who were killed recently in a grenade attack in Baramulla. They sacrificed their lives for the sake of their country.
Additionally, there are so many other jobs such as scientists, teachers, farming which must be paid in contrast to the celebrities. These are the people who play a major role in our society like teachers delve a child into a future responsible citizen of tomorrow. Owing to the reason that they are not getting a handsome salary, teachers are not performing their duties diligently which is perilous for our future generation.
To recapitulate, I would like to conclude the statement by saying that allowing one special class to earn plenty of money and depriving other classes of similar privileges far outweigh any positive effects. It is simply in future nobody will aim to become a doctor or an engineer in fact, everyone will follow the dream of becoming an actor.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, in contrast, in fact, such as, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1273.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80377358491 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63596723172 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.622641509434 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.210946916 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.083333333 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0833333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124745441712 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432362277756 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057092057756 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0666531228553 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312188465165 0.056905535591 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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