Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film starts, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? which other types of jobs should be highly paid?

Essay topics:

Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film starts, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? which other types of jobs should be highly paid?

it is often believed that the celebrities from the field of movies and sports are highly paid as compared to other vital jobs in the society. I agree that the entertainment world are given more importance than other work sector such as firefighters, military and police.

The job of the entertainer is to just entertain the people of the society. although it is a basic requirement of our life, the amount of pay they receive for a single advertisement or film is quite more. This is being observed from their lifestyle, luxurious properties and cars they own. For example, Shah rukh Khan owns house in most of the countries and it is also said that he charges few corers for signing a single movie.

There are some other jobs which ought to be given more weightage in terms of payment as their work is critical and save life of other. Firstly, the firefighters job need to paid more as they risk their life and get seriously injured while trying to save life other human and other living beings. Moreover, their work does not provide any specific working hour, as they have to be on their duty whenever it is required.

Secondly, the people working in military and police need to be given more salary and also should give compensation to their family when they sacrifice their life to save the country from terrorist or other criminals. In addition, they get partially or fully disabled while fighting in wars and are unable to work for any further earning. So, they shall be given pension after serious injury till lifetime.

In conclusion,in my opinion stars are paid very huge amount of money although their work is not critical and dangerous as compared to those people who work in sector in which they have to risk their own life to save life of others.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79099678457 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45545082179 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524115755627 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3683477023 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.615384615 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9230769231 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18329877909 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761398052864 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623266401545 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113555020712 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451990351089 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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