Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, the number of organized group activities has increased as compared to the previous generation. Parents motivate their juvenile to attend such activities in their spare time, while there are some who want them to develop the ability by themselves. This essay will explore some of the reasons for urging a juvenile to attend the organized activity and why they should not do it on their own.
To begin with, by joining such activities they learn how to socialize, moreover, it vanishes the fear of communication with other people. For instance, there are certain activities conducted where everyone comes together to help the elders of society. By helping such people they discover how to socialize and to communicate. Additionally, they acquire the skills of team building and they might discover new skills which they are unaware of.
Secondly, they might take a disadvantage of the opportunity and sway by taking the wrong decision. For example, the use of mobile phones has increased in recent years and they tend to glue themselves when they are free and play games or use social media which is not good for their health. This makes their life sedentary. Moreover, they do not have a proper idea about managing their break.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the juvenile should not give the opportunity to learn by themselves about occupying, instead parents should urge them to join group activities which will help them to overcome fear and make them discover about new things in their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1334.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03396226415 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65284897602 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539622641509 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6573737905 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.166666667 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0833333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278773746858 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970669105607 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651712280941 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130688376398 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0746917170714 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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