Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays a group of people argue to send children for some group based work in their leisure period, whereas others believe it is necessary for one self to manage on their own. In my opinion, young people are malleable so as to grasp whatever they are taught in a team far better than gaining by self. Although teamwork and peer competition influences the child to reach great heights, self learning and personal growth has it own perks for youngsters.
On one hand, children tend to learn teamwork and coordination among a group whenever they are assigned a task. Not only they manage to balance their self but also actions and responsibility of others to complete the particular work. For instance, a recent study in NY Times proves that children are more likely to get more proactive in delivering products when working in pair rather than single. In addition, some competitive spirit among the group always helps to motivate the offspring to perform well so that they can gain better results. Let's say for a school football team, always there is competition to play as forward between many students which is resolved by their performance in practise matches.
On the other hand, a child benefits discovering the process by learning on their own which in turn boost's their confidence, also they feel a sense of achievement. For example, a student making a prototype model for science project on their own will discover many ways to make it work by himself. It also helps the young to grow on by themselves as there is a personal growth of the young one's. Though this can make them feel lonely sometimes.
In conclusion, learning in a group create a sense of belonging and gives more opportunity by being a team player and healthy rivalry among peers than restricting by self for own understanding and personal growth.
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...is a personal growth of the young ones. Though this can make them feel lonely sometime...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, well, whereas, as for, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88461538462 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6412979073 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548076923077 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2848797268 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.230769231 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1538461538 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272833338427 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09220128638 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760347541559 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162891982683 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494533731669 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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