Some people think that children’s leisure activities should always be educational. Others think that it puts too much pressure on children.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is often argued that childhood should only involve enlightening activities, while others disagree and believe that it would put a strain on the younger generations. In this essay, both points of view will be examined and will state that educational leisure is beneficial for stable upbringing since vital skills are acquired.
It is clear that educational activities are of paramount importance for growing versatile person. What I mean by this, the more put children in education and not only academical, the more likely they may succeed. This is because educational games tend to improve or gain vital skills such as negotiation skills, creativity and enhance their self-esteem/ In other words, through participation in these leisure activities young people apparently may build relationships with others, may establish a connection with society and feel positive emotions while trying to achieve common goals. In addition, they indeed may become confident and creative expressing themselves through painting or acting, that is, in completely different actions besides school. Therefore, leisure in an educational way may contribute to acquiring essential skills and knowledge in a more relaxed atmosphere.
Nevertheless, some opponents are of the opinion that this approach to spend leisure time doing educational stuff may only increase stress level rather than benefit offspring. It would mean that parent-controlled leisure activities may bring about aversive feeling and deteriorate family bonds. In addition, it tends to give rise to depression and boredom if leisure time will not to refresh children’s mind after mandatory school subjects. Hence, it probably may affect academic performance. It is therefore clear that hardly ever would educational leisure time benefit when it was forced.
In conclusion, although people may vary in their opinion about whether leisure time should be educational or whether it only increase pressure on adolescents, personally, I think leisure time should include educational actions. Inasmuch as educational leisure helps to gain vital skills that are crucial for stable upbringing.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an educational way" with adverb for "educational"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, besides, but, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, as for, i mean, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.675 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9781430351 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59375 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.2956037373 49.4020404114 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.714285714 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8571428571 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259853355418 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802711642287 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567053803133 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158347686925 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444288900848 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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