Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There is an opinion asserting that creative artists like painters and musicians should be funded by governments. Others, however, are of the opinion that these artists should be provided with financial endorsement by different sources. I, for one, opt for the first view on basis of some compelling reasons.
On the one hand, there exist many means of making money that artists can take advantage of. Firstly, being held on a regular basis, these art exhibitions and concerts are the perfect places for the artists' pieces of art. And the executive of these fairs can give eager artists some financial incentives. This way, artists would get the opportunity to prepare themselves or their artwork. Secondly, universities that offer arts-related courses can play a vital role in this respect. Many of these courses are ready to sponsor creative artists, who are qualified and skilled enough.
On the other hand, others put forward the argument that it is government's responsibility to give funds to creative artists. The most compelling reason justifying their assertion is that art, as well as health and education, is of great value. In other words, many of us truly enjoy listening to a great song or seeing a magnificent painting. All of which have been created by full-fledged artists, and I believe if they were not paid enough attention by government in terms of finance, we would not experience that enjoyable feeling. Each person also finds creative pieces of art interesting to some degree. It might be due to the fact that art is in human’s nature and it piques many individuals’ interest. As a result, it is a good place for governments to invest as it changes the mood of society as a whole.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that the more these creative artists are funded, the more they can foster their abilities, and in turn, the more people are cheerful (contented) in society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun means seems to be countable; consider using: 'many means'.
Suggestion: many means
... reasons. On the one hand, there exist many means of making money that artists can take a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9748427673 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76045466617 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572327044025 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9701553207 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0588235294 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7058823529 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308139789028 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09189702559 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952867754837 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182749568279 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0890684590139 0.056905535591 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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