Some people think that having asset retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to be tired and receive a pension at an earlier age.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which types of workers do you think should benefit from an early retirement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is often argued that single-retirement policy for all workers, irrespective of their job profile is unfair. People believe that workers in certain occupation are entitled to early retirement and pension. This essay agrees with the view that there should be leniency in the retirement plan for people employed in certain sectors. This essay will tell into the matter to give a brief description of some jobs that are more strenuous and the people performing the jobs deserve an early retirement.
People working in physically and mentally challenging job profiles may have deteriorate their health. Constantly working under such conditions for a longer period of time may have permanent adverse effects on their health. Consequently, they will become a burden on their family as well as on the economy. For instance, in a recent study it was found that people such as courier-man and builders, who do manual work are more likely to develop dementia if not allowed to be tired in their 50s.
In addition to that, there are certain occupations which require greater levels of physical fitness. Hence, such jobs are better suited for youngsters then seniors. Truck drivers and Aeroplane pilots are the prime examples, where serious accidents may happen due to poor vision at old age. Moreover, reducing the retirement age of these workers will not only benefit them but will also generate new vacancies.
In conclusion, it can be said that fixed retirement age for all occupations is not fair and the government should consider the job demands before setting a retirement policy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15503875969 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73575325873 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616279069767 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5172969246 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.307692308 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8461538462 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84615384615 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25498539755 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849948238417 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506662687183 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141069484732 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044239018049 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.