Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters(such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Although Sometimes letting children to decide about daily matters (in terms of food, clothes and entertainment) is thought to result in more selfish persons in society, other people think that decisions on more pressing issues they should make on their own.
On the one hand, it is believed that children who are permitted to make their daily life decisions leads the society full of selfish persons often due to the social meme which are running in our society. In other words, children do the same things which their peers do on their day to day activities. For instance, vast majority of children decide when to wear which consume and also what to have in break at school according to their classmates which, consequently, produces more self decision maker children who don’t listen to their parents’ advices. Without this trend, society would get more self sacrificed individuals.
On the other hand, some people consider that children ought to make decisions on situations which affect them many ways, and those decisions often make them self confident and I agree. There are many crucial hindrances which are faced during student life, among them one of the most paramount is to select career profession. In other words, for example, if a person selects their own career line and ends up with utterly job satisfaction, they will feel very proud on themselves. So, with this approach majority of children could handle any confrontation and conflict in a constructive way in their future.
In conclusion, while people may vary their opinions, I think that children become more confident and can fight any deterrents that come across their success if they are allowed to make their own choices on most pressing matters.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, may, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1449.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08421052632 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58257532143 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571929824561 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.2887630315 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.9 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4 7.06120827912 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343464497225 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126483101752 0.084324248473 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921077982295 0.0667982634062 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225574339981 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652027769011 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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