Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?
Many people believe that the retirement age of the individuals should not be same for everyone. They argue that people who are employed in particular occupations deserve to enjoy their retirement and pension plans earlier than other employees. In my opinion, early retirement for certain jobs is logical since many occupations have higher workload than others and these professions which are discussed below are not proper to be filled by old people for the good of everyone.
First and foremost, many jobs are handled in intense conditions and these occupations should only be filled by people who are fully concentrated and capable. For this reason, when employees are unable to fulfill their tasks, it is illogical and inhumane to force them to continue to work. To illustrate, an elderly brain surgeon who does not have clear eye-sight due to his old age, should retire earlier than regular doctors since he should have the desired qualifications, such as seeing the brain cells or veins clearly, in order to cure the patients. Consequently, positions which require the full attention of the employees due to the intensity of the tasks should retire earlier than rest of the employees.
Specific positions such as firefighters, policemen, miners or surgeons should retire in an earlier age than the regular retirement age because they either work in a harsh working environment which depreciate their body substantially, or these positions should be employed by athletic people to handle the duties comprehensively. For instance, a miner who mostly stay under the ground for most of his / her shift without seeing the sunlight, deserves to enjoy his / her retirement earlier than a regular white collar employee who works in a lavish office since the miner already has experienced an exhausting career. Apart from that, an old policeman may not be effective to catch the burglars or murderers since he may not be capable of running, jumping to capture these law breakers. As a result, the positions which require physical fitness or depreciate employees more intensively than other workers, should be ensured to retire and receive pension earlier than others.
To sum up, single retirement age is not a feasible option in a society since many positions should be handled by people who are not old or depreciated. Examples of these positions can be given as the law enforcement officials or people who work in mining that depreciate abundantly.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, may, so, apart from, for instance, in particular, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 398.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19849246231 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81422169525 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489949748744 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 643.5 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.6338578046 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.153846154 106.682146367 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6153846154 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.30769230769 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250688543585 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107844808464 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637850934067 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174565394525 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590915610338 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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