Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles.
Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time.
it has been argued about how to use our free time. Whether to sharpen it with brain games or give it a good rest after work and relax on the sofa. I think it is important to put some stress on your brain every day even after work.
As we grow older we need to keep our brains in good health. In order to that, we need to feed our mind with new ideas and puzzles everyday. When children are born their mind is empty like a formated hard drive. For newborn everything what he or she does is the first. but after a while, things will start to repeat and we develop patterns which we use automatically in everyday life. As we do that our brains do not have to work that hard. we should not stop this developing process because if we do our thinking speed and memory will suffer. that is the reason why many old people have a sharp mind as some in the twenties, they never stopped using their brains.
even tho it is healthy to keep our brain inactive state it can be damaging if it is overdone. some people have really challenging jobs than need a lot of thinking, like brokers. Professionals can manage seven to ten different asset at the same time. that kind of amount of brain activity is exhausting. And the design is needed in seconds which will decide their career. persons like that need to relax and give some rest to the brain. In order to that, they need to find activities that won't strain their brain. like watching tv shows which won't need deep thinking.
To sum up we need to keep learning and keep our brain active every day. I agree that it is important to train and develop our brains if we have leisure time. but as said it needs to be balanced. every person has a different job and profession and according to that, we need to decide how to use our leisure time for the best interests of the brain.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, so, while, i think, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 24.0651302605 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1477.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.26878612717 5.12529762239 83% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.1718359966 2.80592935109 77% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511560693642 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.0871739121 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.2173913043 106.682146367 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0434782609 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04347826087 7.06120827912 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179803760762 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553210026247 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509313036777 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116092478664 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263108396819 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.2 13.0946893788 47% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 50.2224549098 163% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 11.3001002004 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.89 12.4159519038 55% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.62 8.58950901804 77% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.