Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles.
Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time.
It has been argued about how to use our free time. Whether to sharpen it with brain games or give it a good rest after work and relax on the sofa. I think it is important to put some stress on your brain every day even after work.
As we grow older we need to keep our brains in good health. To that, we need to feed our mind with new ideas and puzzles every day. When children are born their mind is empty like a formated hard drive. For newborn, everything that he or she does is the first. But after a while, things will start to repeat and we develop patterns, which we use automatically in everyday life. As we do that, our brains do not have to work that hard. We should not stop this developing process, because if we do, our thinking speed and memory will suffer. That is the reason why many old people have a sharp mind as some in the twenties, they never stopped using their brains.
Even tho it is healthy to keep our brain inactive state, it can be damaging if it is overdone. Some people have challenging jobs than need a lot of thinking, like brokers. Professionals can manage seven to ten different asset at the same time. That kind of amount of brain activity is exhausting, the design is needed in seconds, which will decide their career. Persons like that need to relax and give some rest to the brain. In order to that, they need to find activities that won't strain their brain. Like watching tv shows which won't need deep thinking.
To sum up we need to keep learning and keep our brain active every day. I agree that it is important to train and develop our brains if we have leisure time. But as said it needs to be balanced. Every person has a different job and profession and according to that, we need to decide how to use our leisure time for the best interests of the brain.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...our brain every day even after work. As we grow older we need to keep our brain...
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...d with new ideas and puzzles every day. When children are born their mind is empty l...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... they never stopped using their brains. Even tho it is healthy to keep our brain...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'asset' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'assets'.
Suggestion: assets
...onals can manage seven to ten different asset at the same time. That kind of amount o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, while, i think, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 52.0 24.0651302605 216% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1468.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.27988338192 5.12529762239 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.17823086761 2.80592935109 78% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510204081633 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.264582117 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.7272727273 106.682146367 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5909090909 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.81818181818 7.06120827912 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178539735709 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572239770992 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510530994335 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11617208662 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261905507449 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.5 13.0946893788 50% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 50.2224549098 163% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 11.3001002004 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.25 12.4159519038 58% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.68 8.58950901804 78% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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