Some people think that money can buy all the happiness in life. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and include relevant examples to support your answer.

It is believed by some that happiness in life can be bought with money. In my opinion, money is a prominent factor to sustain a healthy and luxurious life. If money is accompanied by peace of mind, it can bring happiness in one's life.

Firstly, money is not only required for basic necessities such as food, shelter and clothes but also for luxuries of life namely cars, smartphones and laptops. Nowadays, these so called luxuries are becoming part and parcel of people's lives and are slowly turning into necessities. In order to attain these, one ought to have surplus amount of money which is earned through rigorous efforts at workplace. People usually put lots of effort and time to attain wealth that leads to stress and hypertension. For Instance, according to a survey in North America, 70% of workforce are suffering from depression and are unsatisfied with their work.

On other hand, business professionals tend to remain happy compared to employee workforce. To illustrate this, a series of interviews were conducted with businessmen who left their sedentary jobs. As a result of these interviews, most of the people running their own ventures are gay and content. Primary reason for their happiness was stress-free work environment and sums of money they usually earn while doing business.

To conclude, money accompanied by peace of mind, can surely help a person attain happiness.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...Firstly, money is not only required for basic necessities such as food, shelter and clothes but a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, while, for instance, such as, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1174.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 230.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10434782609 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74525195885 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.660869565217 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 362.7 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.4082632239 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.3076923077 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6923076923 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18946608063 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709982253163 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063797739064 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119418587125 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0784602588877 0.056905535591 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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