Nowadays, video games play an integral part in children's life because of games' convenience and innovation. However, some people say that outdoor activities bring more benefits for the development of children than playing computer games. In my point of view, I completely agree with this statement because there are a lot of advantages to outdoor recreational activities.
To begin with, outdoor activities have an indispensable impact on the development of mental and physical strength of children. Firstly, students who take part in sports will have a stronger body and can escape from obesity or heart diseases. Those children will have better knowledge about their body hence they can build muscles and get lean easily. On top of that, playing basketball or soccer after school will also enhance their social skills which are important for making more good friends and becoming positive people in their community. Finally, joining outdoor activities regularly will help children get better memory and reduce stress so that pupils will have a happy life.
On the other hand, playing video games has some downsides. At first, children who spend a lot of their time on computer games have a higher risk of game addiction. Game addiction does not only make their score worse but also limit them with social interaction. Moreover, focusing on the screen and staying in front of the computer will cut down their eyes' ability and their immune system.
In conclusion, children should be lent to participate in outdoor activities or sports to develop comprehensively, learn a number of skills and improve their health.
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- Some people think that outdoor activities are more beneficial for children s development than playing computer games To what extent do you agree or disagree 73
- Some people think young people should be free to choose their job while others believe that they should be realistic and think about their future Discuss both views and give your opinion 84
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, so, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1362.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23846153846 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66052670854 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.619230769231 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.5103063819 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.769230769 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2307692308 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290993106833 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111856679813 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108641931673 0.0667982634062 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188511797273 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102696747955 0.056905535591 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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