Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged.
Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete
become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Modern societies nowadays require juveniles minds who are both competitive and cooperative for progression. While many people believe that adolescents who are taught to co-operate than compete tend to become useful adults where as others disagree. In my opinion, children should be taught co-operation as this builds the right base for them to co-work with the external interfaces for achieving success and becoming successful adults in both professional as well as personal lives. In the below essay I will elucidate both sides of the argument and put forward my opinion to conclude.
Firstly in this era of fierce competition for better education and jobs, it is common these days for parents and teachers to inculcate a sense of competition in children from a tender age. They feel that the children who learn to be competitive will be able to face any challenges in life to become successful adults. For instance, in many schools in India adolescents from a tender age are put under so much pressure from their guardians to score better marks thus inculcating a sense a competition.
Similarly, on the other hand, it can be seen that there are others who argue that children should be taught co-operation than anything else. such a quality will enable them to be a better team player for any outside competition, therefore, making them successful. For instance, in Japan, many juveniles are taught co-operation as the teachers believe that in the society where success is dependent on external factors like teamwork having such a quality will enable them to make adults who can contribute back to the society.
To sum up it is evident that although a sense of competition is necessary for survival however skills such as co-operation are mandatory for achieving success and becoming useful adults.
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but, first, firstly, however, if, similarly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, such as, as well as, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11824324324 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82556669623 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52027027027 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.4374970615 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.727272727 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9090909091 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.2727272727 7.06120827912 202% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283443242098 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118786295199 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070500018955 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176067184634 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050587544883 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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