Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged.
Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete
become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There is no doubt that both competition skills and cooperation skills are of vital importance for students. However, while some believe that developing a competitive child is significant, I would agree with those who feel that it is more prominent to improve cooperation among children.
Considering firstly the positives of competitions, a crucial one is that
it provides children with motivation towards hard work. This is because healthy rivalry tend to encourage students to achieve their targets and outdo their peers. Another important advantage for such a competitive environment is that students are likely to gain a sense of responsibility and become more self-dependent since they are require to solve puzzles, games and other problems on their own. Therefore, when they face a future challenging situation as a job interview, they will be able to manage it more efficiently; thus, they are more prepared to lead a successful life.
As for the cooperation kills, I do believe that they are even more substantial in many aspects of future work life. To illustrate, whereas employees are required to participate in teamwork, follow their manager's instructions and support other junior colleagues, only those with cooperation skills will perform efficiently in workplace. In contrast, if schools adopts the win-lose principal in children's education, they will be lacking cooperation potentials; hens, incapable of becoming efficient employees in the future. Moreover, with regard to social life, a healthy community should include members who are interacting positively and cooperatively with each other. This would indeed enhance harmony and boost sociability.
In conclusion, teaching children through contests is beneficial in terms of promoting motivation, responsibility and dependency among them. Nevertheless, I feel that cooperation is the most powerful approach to prepare students for adults life as it empower them with essential skills to succeed in their career and become devoted citizens.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, as for, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, no doubt, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1718.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65131578947 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1228316577 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608552631579 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3732313742 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.153846154 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3846153846 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1538461538 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128512896705 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464839933856 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426477642485 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0685363697373 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531859443082 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.79 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.82 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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