some people think that young people can learn useful skills by playing electronic and computer games. others argue that people who play electronic and computer games are wasting their time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
It is believed by many that spending time playing video games helps children to learn some basic knowledge, while others think that computer games have a negative influence on children’s lifetime. I am in favour that electronic games consume the youngsters’ time and their demerits are outweighed.
Some argue that playing electronic games are essential for a child, believing that it is considered as an effective method of education, especially at a young age. For example, a friend of mine bought for her two years old daughter an I Pad in order to teach her spelling and counting; although I tried hard to convince her not to do this and to buy books instead, she refused to do so because she thinks that books are outdated method of delivering information and knowledge for the new generation. Thus, many may intensively depend on such gadgets to educate their children and widen their knowledge.
Nevertheless, many people and I tend to believe that we should not expose our children to the virtual world as it considered a waste of their pernicious time. Young adults have immature skills which have to be developed by interacting with people. If children were engaged all the time playing online games, they would not have enough time to sharpen some important skills such as communication skills. For instance, due to the endless of online games, students will have no time to interact with their community or even their own family; as a result, they will become socially isolated because their communication skills had been impaired.
In way of conclusion, using virtual games to build up toddlers’ primary educational level might be the only merit, but this cannot justify the fact that they damage children’s social life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'I'?
Suggestion: an; I
...e bought for her two years old daughter an I Pad in order to teach her spelling and ...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
...knowledge for the new generation. Thus, many may intensively depend on such gadgets to e...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r children and widen their knowledge. Nevertheless, many people and I tend to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, nevertheless, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1477.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1107266436 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88655156386 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60553633218 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.2231443329 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.7 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.2 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25470978637 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985157812409 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606038249964 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134130282572 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0778518061483 0.056905535591 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.95 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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