Subjects like arts, music and drama are more important than other school subjects and therefore should be give more time in the calendar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Presently, the issue of weight-age of different subjects in school curriculum has risen into prominence in many places around the world. However, it is a controversial topic introducing heavy debate concerns the addition of more artistic subjects. That is why, there has been a growing body of opinion in favor of scheduling more time for subjects of music, art and drama in the calendar year of educational institutes. I wholeheartedly concur with this school of thought because more exposure to artistic subjects would not only help students to express their emotions easily but also enable them to earn money in their adulthood.
Unquestionably, more time spent on artistic curriculum in schools would ensure that children are able to convey their emotions through art activities, for example, to draw a painting, to sing a song or play a role in a drama. A statistic was recently released demonstrating the fact that art subjects stimulate the critical thinking at young age, enabling them to understand different perspectives of life. Eventually, pupils learn to analyze what they are feeling and how to express it using art.
Let us not forget either that more focus on these subjects might help students to adopt it as a profession in their future lives. As competition in other academic subjects is stiff, students find it excruciating to find a job related to that study. On the contrary, areas namely music, art or dance offer a variety of choices to get in for earning a decent amount of money. A thorough research has been conducted by Harvard University, UK in 2015 using online survey with a sample size of more than 1000 Indians spanning different age groups and found that they did not get jobs on the basis of academic subjects, thus, adopting their art interest as their professions. Thus, the plausibility of more focus on artistic subjects in schools is clear.
There are some believers who are in consummate discord with above viewpoint and opine that other academic subjects must be allotted more time in schools considering them nonpareil for having students' strong base in studies. However, I say that instead of putting extreme pressure of theoretic subjects, schools need to indulge young ones in more relaxed art subjects with the aim of making them more productive in studies.
Following this look, even though other academic subjects such as math and science play vital role in academic area, schools ought to assign more periods on subjects of art. If authorities invested more on these crucial subjects of arts, students would not perceive going to school as a boring routine.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 41.998997996 169% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 432.0 315.596192385 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0787037037 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73931707268 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543981481481 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 506.74238477 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.2848503152 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.125 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360177562479 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126714987009 0.084324248473 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667981350179 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218496325013 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398161307522 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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