TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

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TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

At the turn of the new century, with the development of humans and modern technology, more and more people tend to explore new things, specifically children. Although many would argue that the parents spend a plethora of time with their children to learn and study is the most important factor in children building, in my opinion, father and mother should to spent a much time to play with them due to has a far greater impact. I would suggest two reasons based on my general facts in addition to my personal experiences to support the argument.

The first aspect to point out is that the parents are great teacher to build children character. Also many benefits quickly stem from our parents. As we know, Nowadays, the parents jobs don't give them opportunity to devote their time to progeny. But they should to focus on their children and play with them due to students spend most of time with their gadgets like laptop and computer, it leads to the sedentary lifestyle and invites many health problems including obesity and diabetes. if parents spend their playing with them and in that way, they can motivate their kids to do some physical healthy activity.
Secondly, several activities are the most important part of our lives. the efficiency of a society is measured by the degree and the quality of its the different activities. I still affirm the same idea because there is no guarantee that the games and fun movement will bring to children a good health. I would like to mention noteworthy research conducted by CSR institute in India. the discovered results suggest that Seventy-Five percent of the young indulge themselves in wrong activites; Furthermore, are diverting their mind against parents and study. All of it because the parents do not share with their child sports or activities to empty a negative energy.

To draw a conclusion, taking what I have mentioned above, I strongly believe that the parents should to spent a lot of time with their children to play activities and encourage to movement due to if the mother and father do that, result in will be in a good psychological and physical for the child.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: A_MUCH_NN1[1]
Message: Maybe you should omit the article "a", leaving only 'much'.
Suggestion: much
...nion, father and mother should to spent a much time to play with them due to has a far...
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Suggestion: Also,
...at teacher to build children character. Also many benefits quickly stem from our par...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... As we know, Nowadays, the parents jobs dont give them opportunity to devote their t...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...roblems including obesity and diabetes. if parents spend their playing with them a...
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Suggestion: The
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...asured by the degree and the quality of its the different activities. I still affir...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, in addition, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84972677596 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60096230788 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540983606557 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.9130957012 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.333333333 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279856220948 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780457583981 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077347846196 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170686842392 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561869415684 0.056905535591 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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