Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
At the turn of the new century, with the development of humans and modern technology, more and more people tend to extend explore new things, take risks and be different from others in their life. Actually, people attitude towards this issue is varied from person to person. Although many would argue that doing the same things every day is the most important factor for the human to gain a lot of experience and success, In my opinion, take risks and doing different things has a far greater impact for the people. I would suggest two reasons based on my general facts to support the argument.
The first aspect to point out is that many benefits quickly stem from doing different things. Admittedly, risks are omnipresent in our daily life to gain a high success. I would like to mention noteworthy research conducted by CSR institute in India. The discovered results suggest that Seventy-Five percent of the people indulge themselves to take risks to be successful in their life. and also it causes excessive success as people's creativity to burgeon through overcoming with novel obstacles.
Secondly, success has a close tie-in motivation and creativity. I still affirm the same idea because there is no guarantee that success is the most important part of our lives. the efficiency of a human is measured by the degree and the quality of its work and take different risks to make Invention for the society. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what has elaborated above. Christophe Colomb, for example, might not be a successful explorer if he denied taking risks and entering a new area. As a result, any effort which is ended up with prosperity is always accompanied with different risks.
To draw a conclusion, taking what I have mentioned above, I strongly believe that there has been a positive correlation between trying new things and being successful. As it was mentioned, successful people need to flourish their creativity and audacity to overcome with their intrinsic fears and obstacles because without risks and doing different things in our life, we couldn't able to be a success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, for example, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1761.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94662921348 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6586199437 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564606741573 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0470767497 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.588235294 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9411764706 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58823529412 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256853690705 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734652403307 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460428324859 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165635826444 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350602685747 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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