Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.
At the turn of the new century, with the development of humans modern society, more and more people tend to explore and try doing new things, take risks and be different from others in their life, one of the most significant ways to take risks is doing anything dangerous or something like that, but it seems to me Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.
In the first place, if we make an investigation on successful people's life, we will figure out that they did not distinguish from the other people by fantastic and extraordinary specialists in their characters. In fact, most of them were living like the other ordinary people, without having a rich family or even strong support from their family. For instance, Steve Jobs was a person who changed the operating computer system as a way which would be usable for an ordinary person. The evolution of the computer systems was done by a simple and creative college student in his home's basement. He was not rich, but he was studied and worked more and more, and also he utilized his knowledge and creativity to present the noble work to reach this successful which has changed the computer world because of him. Perhaps, there are dozens of talented people with noble ideas, but among them, a limited number of people have ventured and enough confidence to express their ideas and try to use it.
In addition, the life is boring without risks because it is predicted and there is nothing new to experience. I mean a person who accept risks and its consequences in daily life is ready for new experiences because he isn't afraid. So life has something new every day and people can enjoy it more and more. Personally, I'm a person who is always open for new experiences because I love them to try and take a risk to achieve my goals, For example, I remember when I was in high school I was want to learn diving to realize something under the sea, and but I didn't learn swimming firstly, however, I was did it with a professional diver and enjoyed at this time to make this Adventure in order to know a new things under the sea.
To put the issues into a nutshell, there are not so many people who use their own creativity and knowledge for becoming outstanding. They try new things and take risks to get their goal for becoming successful.
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...lize something under the sea, and but I didnt learn swimming firstly, however, I was ...
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...tstanding. They try new things and take risks to get their goal for becoming successful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, i mean, in addition, in fact, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57411764706 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49486781171 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517647058824 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.458539005 48.9658058833 228% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 149.538461538 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.6923076923 20.6045352989 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.61538461538 5.45110844103 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298182135357 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091749908347 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142619506576 0.0737576698707 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212825433753 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.198460130964 0.0645574589148 307% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.82 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 10.002688172 270% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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