Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
At the turn of the new century, with the development of humans and modern technology, more and more people tend to explore more things around the world, specifically the young generation. Certainly, some people if asked would agree with the statement that the opinions of celebrities are more important to young generations more than older people, while others would say that the question is double-edged due to a lot of factors involved. As far as I am concerned, I believe that famous people have a strong effect on a juvenile for some reasons that I elaborate them in the following paragraphs.
The first aspect to point out is that many benefits quickly stem from famous persons. Admittedly, famous people are a great teacher to build the young generation. I would like to mention noteworthy research conducted by CSR institute in India. the discovered results suggest that Seventy-Five Percent of the young people indulge themselves in following and listening to the celebrities to learn from them. Furthermore, young people try to be similar to their popular celebrities as much as possible. Therefore, whenever these celebrities have an opinion about anything, teenagers accept their point of view more easily than the other people's viewpoints.
Secondly, prominent people are the most important part of our lives as young people. the efficiency of a society is measured by the degree and the quality of its followers for famous people. I still affirm the same idea because there is no guarantee that the very important persons are omnipresent in our daily life and effect for everything in the society such as the economy, politics, and tourist etc. My own experience is a compelling example of this I usually follow a lot of celebrities. One of them started a campaign against rape in the country. Firstly she started with a poll in social media which gained a lot of attention. Then a massive program was conducted where people were called for support. young people like me are instantly drawn by such ideas and we start supporting their theme.
To draw a conclusion, taking what I have mentioned above, I strongly believe that young people consider celebrities point of view more important than older people do because young people have access to celebrities' official web pages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07124010554 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78450011132 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551451187335 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9721895117 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.777777778 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0555555556 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276414030232 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774140002043 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536081326572 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167601905374 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599298187005 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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