Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
At the turn of the new century, with the development of humans and modern technology, more and more people tend to explore new things and depends on their themselves to take a decision on it, specifically the youth people. Although many would argue that young people depend on their father to take a decision to build their character and their life, In my opinion, Nowadays, the young generation with the more education and experience, they able to take action and depends on themselves to a create their future, but with taken advise from their parents. I would suggest two reasons based on my general facts in addition to my personal experiences to support the argument.
The first aspect to find out is that the education and technology are a great teacher to build character to take action to do anything, but no can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact many benefits quickly stem from our parents. I would like to mention noteworthy research conduct by CSR institute in India. the discovered results suggest that Seventy-Five Percent of the young generation indulge themselves in technology and learn more about everything around them to take action for themselves, but also they consult their parent due to the fathers have a lot of experience and several situations in their life which may benefit their children in their lives.
Secondly, parents are the most important part of our lives. The efficiency of a society is measured by the degree, quality and the relationships between the fathers and their young people. I still affirm the same idea because there is no guarantee that the old people are omnipresent in our lives and their bits of help for the youth people. my own experience is a compelling example of this I remember when I was in the previous company I had a problem with my manager and I was so nervous every time, Furthermore, I went to my father to discuss this issue to take a decision If I'm will leave my position in the organization or not, after a long conversation with my parent, he gave me your advice, I took a decision to stay at the company due to he has a vision for the future for my company.
To draw a conclusion, taking what I mentioned above, I strongly believe that the young people are not dependant on their parents to make decisions but to take advise and just helpful from them due to they have access to a wide range of information from various sources even the young people are able to make their decisions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2034.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67586206897 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64806831882 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496551724138 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 20.1344086022 194% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 122.262013725 48.9658058833 250% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 184.909090909 100.406767564 184% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.5454545455 20.6045352989 192% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63636363636 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343042300391 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120022105489 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100021297362 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221178126058 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702909959989 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 11.7677419355 173% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.35 58.1214874552 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 10.1575268817 170% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.0537634409 175% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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