Essay topics: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
At the turn of the new century, with the development of humans and modern technology, more and more people tend to extend to explore new things around the world including famous entertainers because they become an important part of society. Although many would argue that the athletes and famous persons should to have privacy for them life, In my opinion, they must open them life to the society due to they are model for the young people. I would suggest two reasons based on my general facts in addition to my personal experiences to support the argument.
The first aspect to point out is that many benefits quickly stem from famous entertainers. Admittedly, famous persons are a great teacher to build character. Specifically, young generation. I would like to mention noteworthy research conducted by CSR institute in India. The discoverd results suggest that Seventy-five Percent of the youth indulge themselves in following athletes programmes due to they are an effect on the young people in their life such as clothes, solve problems, and also how to speak and make a presentation front of people in public events. Furthermore, there has been a positive correlation between famous persons and being successful to effect of a young generation.
Secondly, famous persons are the most important part of our lives as a youth. the efficiency of a society is measured by the degree and the quality of its following famous entertainers but in good activities to help young people in their life. I still affirm the same idea because there is no guarantee that the famous people are omnipresent in our daily life. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I remember when I was in university I followed many famous persons on television to aware and update my knowledge of fashion in this period, Furthermore, I watched it and went to buy this suit which him wears the famous person in T.V, because, Nowadays, I didn't have any information on fashion or how to wears to cloths formal meetings for example.
To draw a conclusion, taking what I have mentioned above, I strongly believe that the famous entertainers and athletes privacy has a close tie-in motivation and creativity for the young people to learn from him a lot of things because they are an important corner in the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, for example, in addition, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92544987147 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78846257925 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52442159383 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.9318820114 48.9658058833 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.733333333 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9333333333 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180315136631 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541712065381 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404962313689 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118198219507 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405480707111 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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