Write about the following topic:
More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.
Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
Today, many kids are becoming obese, especially those who belong to developed nations. Few people argue that this is a pressing concern. In this essay, I will scrutinize the reasons behind the problematic statement above and the consequences of it.
To start with, Although kids today are getting over-fat in developed countries, the case is similar in developing countries too. This is a matter of concern. Studies say that there are multifaceted reasons for this problem. The major issue is the supply of adulterated foods, packed food entailed with preservatives. While the consumption of sugary products is to a greater extent, fresh produce is less eaten simultaneously. Besides, the craze of finger foods has spread worldwide which is unhealthy generally. To exemplify, french fries are globally preferred by kids and adults. Moreover, people in developed nations can comparatively overfeed the kids and pamper them as they can afford it.
But, such unhealthy habits affect the children the most. There are few severe impacts. Firstly, they are at high risk of complex ailments like
Cardiovascular disease and Diabetes. They can also miss out on fun throughout their life. For instance, a child who weighs over 80 kg cannot perform any adventure, while other kids of the same age can do it easily. In addition, such adolescents can become victims of
mental harassment or torture which can lead to depression and a lack of confidence.
To sum up, Although, the majority of overweight kids are found in developed countries. The reason is not related to the country especially, but the quality of food supplied to the market these days and being obese can suffer through complicated life situations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, in addition, to start with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21739130435 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85836270356 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.663043478261 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.145368397 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.7894736842 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5263157895 20.7667163134 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161168273058 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478343309885 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627493325276 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0672526501726 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486799086794 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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