The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
Our friends are important parts of our lives. They can help us in various situations and make our lives more enjoyable. Some people argue that it is important to maintain our friendships with a small number of our friends for a long time. However, others, including the author, believe that what is more important is that we can make new friends easily through our lives because of the following reasons.
First of all, people's conditions are always changing. We are not at the same place and state where we were five years ago. Within these changes, we would inevitably lose some of our close friends. At first, people make friends at their elementary school. Then, they would meet new people at their high school, and then they enter college and university. After graduation they would work in a company which is a complete different situation in comparison to their studying facillities. So they should be able to make new friends within these stages of their lives to enjoy their moments. Take my own experience, for example. I am a outgoing person. Within each stage of my life, I have made some new friendships. When I enetered university, I knew no one to even talk with. It was very hard to deal with this new part of my life all by myself. Therefore, I started making new friends. To make a long story short, today I have totally overcome the challenges of this new season of my life. This experience taught me that it is more essential to have the ability of making new friends to stay happy and facilitate affair of our lives.
Second, people's personality are always changing. Events of one's life shape his/her attitudes, and accordingly, there has always been the possibilty that our friends become persons whom we barely know and can connect together easily. Some people encounter bad conditions within which they entirely become another person. A divorce may change one person's life, and after then he/she become a anti-marriage person. In this hypothetical case, one would not be able to maintain friendship with his/her friends who might be married and they are happy with their lives. As is known to all, people can stay friends with whom have somethings in common. Thus, it is important to make new friends easily to simply avoid this adverse situations.
To sum up, Friendship is of great significance in our lives. We should be able to make new friends easily. Sometimes we have to do this because either our conditions are changed or the friends we know might be changed. All people should consider the points mentioned above to have a happy and satisfactory life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...ortant to maintain our friendships with a small number of our friends for a long time. However, o...
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Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...then they enter college and university. After graduation they would work in a company...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ke my own experience, for example. I am a outgoing person. Within each stage of m...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ory short, today I have totally overcome the challenges of this new season of my ...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...sonality are always changing. Events of ones life shape his/her attitudes, and accor...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...sons life, and after then he/she become a anti-marriage person. In this hypotheti...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... case, one would not be able to maintain friendship with his/her friends who migh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, first of all, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81838565022 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55592498299 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484304932735 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0043444874 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.6333333333 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8666666667 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289007721815 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780302227639 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770781056806 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182995335382 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529310929748 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.08 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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